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So they became 10.000 years older in 10.000 years… No way

So comfusing it’s unreadable because of the bad translation. Read two chapters and didn’t know what was going on half the time

Use both? One for normal and one for rings

His soul skills overlap way too much

You have a sad life

Yeah he can just create a sewerage system for his toilet and a tank to make hot and cold water for his toilet

Swear words easily breaks the immersion into a story, works best if it’s used sparingly. And I personally don’t know anyone my age that just goes cursing when in a pressed situation It feels more like a little kid away from his parents

Reread it still not a fan but maybe another audience, but that was one of the problems. The whole reason I quit the novel was the glazing in chapter 7, it was all reaction, nothing driving the story forward. Personally chapter seven was a major problem in a string of minor problems and that is what make me take a negative outlook on the novel. Normally I don’t review novels, only when I think the reader with the same taste as me, will get a wrong impression of the novel based on the already existing reviews. I will only review novels that are too highly reviewed and too lowly, or just an all around great novel.

Small changes? You made the story more dark, added another main villain, made Harry and his friends explore old ruins and stuff like that, made Harry smarter, gave backstories to every magical race and stuff like that It ruins the flow of the story for me, I could understand small changes, but you made him write a new story with Harry Potter as a reference, and not just made up for obvious plot holes. But one of the reasons J.K didn’t do that was because if could easily become a messy book and oversaturated with info, much harder to keep a decent passing if the author has to juggle a lot and it can get confusing for a casual reader to keep track of important plot points. You made the MC as humble as possible? He said “I’m going to give you a best seller for the next 10 years” and first chapter he just took it for granted his friend helped him with the acting job. First time we saw the female lead she walked into a business meeting without shoes and socks, and you would probably argue that she slept there, but she still walked around in a professional work environment like that. And that isn’t “a little quirky” that is distracting and unprofessional

Dropped at Chapter 7 all reaction, Nothing with taking the story forward. Wasn’t a fan of making Harry Potter a completely different book either, completely changed the target group of the novel by making it darker, a lot of children loved it growing of but the mc choose a smaller audience too satisfy a small group of fans MC is fine but annoying, has a giant ego and just feels unpleasant. The “it was exactly 1 min and something something since of left bla bla bla” is weird Female lead is too annoying, “I’m dark and cool so I don’t want to read light hearted novels” even when they can have the biggest audience.