The_Best_3329

🙏🏻

There are repeating paragraphs again

Ngl i really dislike the powerscaling in this novel the powerlevels of dumbeldor voldi and the bunch of monsters are too high like it just doesnt feel like hp magic. Also harry just feels too weak especially space magic should be so much more op than its portrait

Honestly I would like for you to have nothing special planed for the year for once

Well this is becoming one big house of madness that I have a feeling will all be resolved at the end of the 7th Hogwarts year and there will be an Happy End like every hp fic. There are so many powerful people that have no right existing in the hp world I know it ai but you destroyed the original iffy worldbuilding. Like I’m going to belive that muggles pose any danger at this point when it’s said Grindelwald killed millions with just a few spells and so on. Also I really dont like that everything seems to have to happen like in cannon in every schoolyear. Aside from the fact that with your powerups for everyone aside the good people. It will be very unbelievable for harry to be able to compete. You made him look like an ant in front of Grindelwald and thet with his insta death gun. It just feels way to rushed this story would be way better if it was paced over a longer time period than just the Hogwarts years

Tbh i want to se Arcturus rain down hell on everyone after the big word he threw at harry

He already learns that lessen in the 2nd year and it changed nothing

Well so the on etching he could have prepared for bc of his knowledge but he somehow didn’t if you don’t know what to prepare for go with educated guesses and since a maze was in the book and he should know of them at least some preparation in this direction could have been prudent. Like this panicking thing about not having control only works when he really doesn’t have any control but he has choices but chose to stay so stick to it with pride even if it is your downfall since it was your decision

Well at least this is way better for the plot that actually introducing timetavel

I really think you need to stop bringing in new plotline without finishing old ones it’s getting hard to track and believe. Bc this implies that the magical world is basically all the time at the edge of the abyss and it not taping over becomes less believable every time