Gian_Carpio

Has the heart of a great story but lacks depth. For a cultivation novel to truly bloom, one needs careful planning, astute details and masterful execution. When the author refers to Contribution points as CP it lowers the scene, ripping of the curtains of the play. When the author makes MC fights, the words used are an after thought as if the author just wants us to know how the fight happened. We don’t want to know about the fight- we want to experience the fight. The author needs to be our eyes ears touch taste and smell. Not a recap on what happened. To tell more about the writing of the story; it is like being told the events of what happened instead of the author setting the scene, and inviting the reader to immerse themselves into a world of his own creation Although the story is good, the author didnt give me a desire to put my heart in the characters nor place my self in the role of MC. Even the way the words are laid out, I just feel… indifference.

Retard mc he already asked this question in the exact situation in chap 81. Retard author

He already asked this in chapter 81

So why is he sharing his info when he was already betrayed by all of them? To get betrayed even further?

MTL deserves 1 stars. Lmao the story was interesting unfortunately webnovel keep spouting these bs

Why are we changing tenses mid sentence

Why did*

Ii hope this comment is helpful for the author since theres a lot of things author didnt thinka about. the readers still don’t know why the levels matter and i’ve read a hundred chapters. I doubt even author knows. Theres a lot of bugs in the interfaces the author has established. The MC’s contract doesnt make sense, is it equal exchange or what. Mc’s status doesnt show skills. Author doesnt show his pets skills he basically gives them a concept that they do in fights. One attacks and one heals thats it. The evolution concept is too vague. Etc. The author refuses to show sht. Author flexes his combat writing too much that it becomes stale since author refuses to show skills beforehand it smells like asspull when he finally does show it. What needs to be shown - Fenrir’s skills and the breakthrough points of Ena. For example 1000 Ena = get this skill. 10000 ena get this next one etc. We don’t even know his full set right now just basic passives. How other pets work. We know MC is special but we wont know how special he is without comparison. Also why doesnt noble houses just stuff their kids full of ena if thats the only way to get a strong summon? It might be rare but this is a noble focused world after all. Why would the Prince mole reveal himself for that one activity in the eternal dream realm? There’s no actual good prize in that realm that can boost the prince power. Atleast author hasnt shown any. If he listed stuff that can boost the prince hugely in the exchange list it would be better. If not then a long term mole is 100x better than random shit he can buy. Also set up a currency, while author is too focused on schemes the audience will fail to appreicate the root if they dont know its price in accordance to the world. This is world building 101. Like the dragon scale too. Also the first scene it wouldnt even make sense for there to be a terrorist attack. They should have just sent in spies then build ties to the weak students so they can turn them. Attacking the school seems dumb. It also doesnt make sense that their every activity doesnt go to the dream world. The author has to imply it costs something and has to explain why in certain times they can afford it and whats so special that they needed to use the dream world if it was a limited resource. The schools world building is also too paltry we see mc saying his room is small and that they could fight for resources to expand it but do they even have currency in the school? Exactly. Theres only so much better than average story telling can do to hide and patch up these holes.

Had the potential to be 5 star, it had the potential to be number 1. But author was too impatient. There are a lot of aspects where it just needed a littlle push a little shining.

Rui literally one shots him in their next fight :/