AriResonance_

author passed away sadly

what happened?

author pov

why do u always complain? what are u even talking about?

Intresting concepts so far but too many commas and the grammar is overall bad. Seems interesting though I may revisit

The writing is all over the place. Most of it is just so confusing. Can’t tell weather this is past or present tense. Descriptions were odd and narrator sounded schizophrenic. Im gonna keep reading it because i see potential. This isn’t Terrible and the synopsis is good. My interest is there.

I see potentially but started off weakly. Mc’s parents tragically die but mc dies at the same time of what i presume a heart failure? Something of the sort. No tension or excitement built up. Was pretty flat. There is potential right mow but it isn’t my cup of tea.