AdamFlores

Hm, yeah, that is some pretty solid advice. Establishing the MC's persona before the plot actually starts is something I should have done... Though, I did kind of did it with his inner monologue, but I guess it wasn't enough. But yeah, this was my first fan fiction- my first time writing, so I just kind of yoloed it and wrote whatever came to mind at that point without much planning

I do appreciate the constructive criticism, and indeed, that sentence is cliche. But I don't think that there is anything wrong with occasionally following cliches. But anyway, I am curious... What do you think would be a better reaction for him? What would be the most realistic reaction that Adam would have in his situation?

Thanks for the fresh meme 🙏. And of course... If the MC has a sister in a fanfiction/novel.... we all know what's going to happen.... (hint: it will be like something that happens in Alabama)

It was more like that he was hopeful that his cheat finally arrived. But that's the thing, since the cheat wasn't there from birth, and it appeared only now, this makes it more suspicious in his eyes. And anyway, in the end, he obviously accepted it. As despite his suspicions, the desire to survive was stronger

It shows an error when I try to send you a friend request.... Or maybe I'm stupid and did something wrong. Anyway, here is my own username, if you want to add me: the_one_adam_flores

Thanks, man. I will definitely message you in the future for any Elder Scrolls lore. And, you seem like an Elder Scrolls lore master.... So when this fanfiction starts to have Elder Scrolls content, I will definitely send you what I have written so you can confirm if it is lore accurate (That is if you want to, of course)

I have played the Dragonborne DLC, so I know who Miraak is. And... Ahem, this is a bit embarrassing, but, I have basically skipped over every book I obtained. Though I knew that these books contained lore, I didn't read them because, simply, I preferred to watch videos on youtube about Skyrim and Elder Scrolls lore. Though, I haven't watched anything of this short because I first want to finish Skyrim. But because of real life and a lack of desire for playing games (except for Maplestory, strangely), I haven't played in a long time. Anyway, thank you again for the explanation, this was actually something I knew nothing about before, so thanks.

Oho.... Riku, I really like your thought process. But which version of Raven was she? I really need to know if that specific version of hers had something special, and which powers she initially had. Also, I would need to research this specific version's background, in order to find a way for her to be incorporated into this fanfic But I am just going to say this, I don't know much about DC beyond the basics, so I don't really know how to develop this further. And honestly, your ideas have been very interesting and amazing, so I am all ears for your suggestions.

Huh... Okay, fair point. I mean, if Madelyne is created, Adam would definitely save her. But I think something more one-side would be more fitting to happen. Even if something does happen, Madelyne won't really be the focus, and she won't be given the spotlight. And yes, Adam will eventually go to DC

Thank you, it is nice to hear that. And indeed, she is childish, lazy, and ignorant. Though it isn't really Kiana's fault, as she is basically a 9 year old clone, so she is definitely lacking in that mental department.... And of course, the fact that her 'father'/ guardian left her doesn't really help in that situation. This is a bit yapping, but I am just going to put this out here: It really frustrates me when the characters in fanfictions don't grow because of the MC's meddling. Like, it seriously annoys me when the MC solves each and every problem, which doesn't leave the other characters opportunities to grow and get stronger. So, you can rest assured that something like this won't happen in this fanfiction.