I'm too sweet in person that my mom became diabetic... Amateur Writer but I'm trained at Music, Foreign Languages and Art. (for short, I'm struggling financially ahaha)
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same... but not that much.
Ah yes, the first sentences themselves dictated that the author recognizes quality writing. The MC has a consistent design as the plot moves forward [Effortless, Humble and even Cautiously Smart]. I'm not that familiar with systems and cultivations but this book gave easy explanations for me to grasp the concepts of the two. I hope you'll do well and attain the success this novel deserves!
you can remove the [then!] after the word convenient for a smoother read.
You can remove the second comma here so it won't look too cumbersome.
just change it to~ [Another peak master cut him off]. to make it less clunky because the next statement showed that it was indeed a woman that had cut him off.
MC be following Covid protocols lol
lol "Lablats" and "<3".
add a space between hand and Fristly. gosh delete my comments later ahahaha I became a free proofreader.
Add a space on your last sentence... or am I just tripping?
Okay, first sentences in and I already caught the Author's way of writing... simple yet impressive and time-smart.