changthemhoes
im curvy and i like it
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Blaize stopped in his track and sighed. 'Why couldn't they just leave me alone?'- changthemhoes1yrcông bố
it is decent but still has many flaws first grammar: the grammar is doable to be honest, if you can tolerate poor grammar, I think you'll be fine. story/plot: the plot was weird alright, are you still trying to make dance of the dragons by killing aemma and baelon? and also your sudden technological uplift is kind of unrealistic, and really around 500,000 to 600,000 in just under 2 years that's just a big fat bull. character: the mc is just mediocre goody two shoes who tries to please anyone, I mean just smaug or toruk can make scorched army to death, you also said that your essarian flying lizard scales are hard as steel, so whats stopping mc's ass to fight, and also if the mc main concern using dragons against slaves he wished to free, he can just use sheer strategy or assasination to defeat the slavers and wise masters, man, plot holes are every where. anyways it's still a decent read if you want a wish fullfullment or a valyrian idiotic power wank
Sách này đã bị xóa - changthemhoes1yrcông bố
good and bad but mostly bad, you're writing ain't really for me it feel so bland and boring that i dropped your ff at chapter 14 just for the writing man, secondly i don't like how you build your relationship be it friends, family or love interest you make them feel unreal and forced on the way you write, i know i really have a lot to say because i dropped this at an early stage but i just couldn't read this so much cringeness when i just got back reading ff still think you had the creativity and imagination for one author. goodluckies P.S. a onepiece fanfiction where the mc had no devil fruit is ain't it man.
- changthemhoes2yrcông bố
god how should i put this, jeez aight, when i first looked at it thought, this looked promising, but it isnt. cliche reincarnation BS rhen wishes, and the dialogue, god, it is so cringe i get butterflies in my stomach. also harem always destroy the story, it is still doable of only 2 or 3 wife but seeing it you gonna way more than that, heck you might even f*ck ever in the verse kriglh. should not even deseve 4 above ratings, ps: you're readers are just brainless muck loser who probably dont get out their houses
- changthemhoes2yrbình luậnCh 39 39 - "End" of the battle
- changthemhoes2yrcông bố
welp, this is good from the start then got badreal quick , i thought me gonna see some dark lord rise but no, mc become goody 3 shoes, the power level is kind of absurd and the use of his magic becoming more less and less(i thought thats the point of this xover, the use of magic(wizardy) in marvel), summmary is that he has living plot armors, for extra dimensional beings - lady death (i think that will change sooner or later?) in mortal plane eell he has - ancient one and hela i think, i dunno bout this 1 im still on chapter 233 eell that pretty sums up my review anyhoo this decent if you want something to enjoy or to pass time.