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vasvik0451mthbình luậnDanzo alone in the room was actually busy devising cruel plans to capture senju nawaki, his devious mind working at a speed of light to make a fool proof plan.- vasvik0451mthbình luậnCh 73 Kaito Chapter 73
- vasvik0451mthcông bố
I know Author is new to writing story and I can see it in early chapters and I can see the improvement from chapter 1 to chapter 73 but still something is missing in this fanfic. Maybe the characters isn't that flesh out? or the style of writing is kinda average? I don't know. But when I compare this to 'The Adventurous Gamer Ninja - Daichi Hekima' The story becomes kinda pale, I hope the author take some tips or inspiration from other successful story or fanfic and try to improve the story and his writing style. I am giving this 5 star because I like this fanfic very much and I hope the author improves and continue to make good chapters.
- vasvik0451mthbình luận"You are a coward, Danzo," Hiruzen finally managed to calm down. "Hide in your shadows. Scheme as much as you want. Because you will only realize how utterly alone you are when you stand above my dead body. You will realize that the reason you think you are the smartest in the room is because you are the only one in that room. You will isolate yourself with your flawed thinking, and you will never be able to listen to anyone else. That's why you will never be suitable to be a Hokage. And that's why you will never be one."
- vasvik0451mthbình luậnCh 22 Chapter 22
- vasvik0451mthbình luậnIt was too precise a movement to be luck. That moment alone made everyone understand that even at this stage, Hiruzen was the God of Shinobi. From there on, the fight was one-sided in Hiruzen's favor. His movements made no sense to Danzo. They were clumsy, unpredictable, and very effective.
- vasvik0451mthbình luậnJust then, Kakashi felt the sharp point of a kunai pressed against his neck. The real Kaito had appeared behind him, ready to claim victory. "Nah, I win this time." Kaito stated confidently as he lowered the kunai from Kakashi's neck.
- vasvik0452mthtrả lời Fortunate_Soul
she was the uchiha girl who was saved by daichi in chapter 69.
Daichi looked down as he heard that question. 'I originally created this for Obito in the event he ever came for Reo but now…' - vasvik0452mthbình luậnCh 289 Chapter 289 - Daichi's Fury 02
- vasvik0452mthbình luận
It didn't come off as cringe or edgy. In my point of view, If a person who is close to you is kidnapped and only one person know of her whereabout and he is not telling you no matter how much you plea to him then what will you do? you have to take some drastic measures to save him or her right? i think he (mc) is just emotional and really want to save those two quickly before they die. So it made sense why would he do that, it didn't come off as cringe to me.
I had to rewrite several parts of this chapter when i wrote it. I don't know if this is cringy or edgy or cool. So I'm eager to know your opinions. Please comment. - vasvik0452mthbình luận
I totally forgot she existed😅
Daichi looked down as he heard that question. 'I originally created this for Obito in the event he ever came for Reo but now…' - vasvik0452mthbình luậnIf the main character is a man, that's great!
- vasvik0454mthcông bố
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