Yep, a new one appears each week. I still don't know why though.

Into a good story, I hope.

Huh, it is always fun seeing people hate him.

Is that the correct way of writing it? English is my second language and I am still learning it by myself, so there is a lot I don't know yet.

"Narrator: Wealth, fame, power. The world had it all won by one man: the Pirate King, Gold Roger. At his death, the words he spoke drove countless men out to sea. Gold Roger: My treasure? It's yours if you want it. Find it! I left all the world has there! Narrator: And so men set sights on the Grand Line, in pursuit of their dreams. The world has truly entered a Great Pirate Era!" ** OPENING ENSUES **

"chapter 1: CHAPTER 1" Yeah, you should give it a more proper title. Unless you put this title for a purpose, such as comedy or something like this.

Ok, here is the review. So, I get you are still starting as a writer, and I will take this into consideration. Though, I will still be honest, since honest criticism is the best way for a writer to improve. Don't take this as a offense, but you don't really have a story here. You have written a series of events and that is basically it. My best advice would be, pick what you have written already and use it as base for a more developed rewrite. For exemple, in the first chapter Sarah wakes up in the middle of a nowhere forest, how does she react to that? Is she surprised and disoriented because this is the first time something like this happened to her? Is she okay with it because she lives there? Focus on things like this. The way things are written now are, "Sarah wakes up, a slime appears, she defeats the slime", as a basis for the story, the bones of the thing, there is no problem. But you need to write scenes around and connecting these events, characters reactions and interactions, descriptions, things like that. Also, don't worry too much and just keep writing, with time you will get the gist of things, when I started I wrote worse stories than this one.

So, I was thinking of reading up to five chapters and then giving it a proper review. But, I didn't count for two things, the chapters to be this long and the fact that I am a lazy reader. Here is the new deal, I will still read up to 5 chapters, but more slowly and commenting in each chapter, and at the end I will give a proper review of the story. First chapter, not my cup of tea, I admit. I tend to prefer lighter things in general, but I like varying, so I'll try reading with an open mind here. I liked the narration and the descriptions, they work for me and succeed in communicating the gruesome and dark vibes and emotions of the scenes. An element I didn't like was the repeat of the motivations of the protagonist, nothing wrong with the character itself and her motivations, but she explained her motivations through thought three times in the first chapter, that was kinda unnecessary. I liked the protagonist and characters reactions such as her desperate struggle for life, the emotion at the hug, the dark-haired guy and his "nice" killing and confrontation. That's good characterization, keep with it. Overall, it's pretty good, the only element that I think could be improved I already mentioned, I kinda would have preferred not knowing about her now, and focus more on the visceral reactions, but that is more personal than objective.