Omnitheus

Rating it with 5/5 Writing quality - I found minimal to none issues with writing that could be fixed with self proofreading. Really, it actually looks like it was written by someone using English as their first language. I would recommend though putting colors using figures of speech and idioms since it is set in a modern world. Maybe some pop reference to get a zeitgeist and comparison on the leads to actual people. Updates - can't complain. Quality > Quantity Story Dev't - The exposition of characters, to me, is a bit too long. The first two chapters should make or break whether the author could keep a reader hooked. I would recommend straying from too much info at the beginning. Since the author uses omniscient 3rd party writing, he/she could in corporate expositions within scenes to justify an act. Too much of the setting right at the start could easily go stale and readers want to read fiction and think. Make them. Character design - Both were well thought of like the author has actual knowledge or experience of the professions the characters have. All in all, with a few modification with the writing style, it could be narrated better, especially that this is told in two perspectives which should make it interesting. See more of your writings around.

Hey there, Empress! I reached out to your IG. Kindly keep in touch when you read it. :)

You have a good cover yourself. DM my IG with the style you would like for your cover and let's see if I can commit. I don't want to oversell my drawing skills. LOL! Thanks for the wonderful review.

Author here, guys. This is posted August 18, 2021. Due to an infringement dispute that I have with a particular seller in Amazon who tries to monetize my work by printing hard opies, I'm slowing my releasing of chapters to twice a week on weekends so this pirate can no longer steal my work as we resolve this. Thank you for your support.

Thank you so much good sir!

Wow! I'll be sure to keep meeting and beyond your expectations!

I purposely strayed from the usual light / web novel story telling style. Hope you liked it. ;)

Thank you good sir!

Wow! I do hope that too. Thanks for your support!

Thank you kindly for your support and review!!