Seishi_
Trying my best to be at least good.
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If I'll be brutally honest here, well, I can't say anything wrong on the story itself as it was on your style. However, as I read, some spaces are double spaced. Also, there are some unnecessary symbols like "—" and "," where you could just end it with a "." I just found your Punctuation Marks Usage as wrong here. Anyway, the story is still good. Keep it up and not the wrong usages.
Somehow, the first two chapters got me confusing, not gonna lie. Overall, the story of this fanfic is great that I read it so fast. I hope that you'll make each chapters longer, so each waiting time is long worth it. I'm just suggesting it. I promise that it will work more. To sum it all, the story and Loki are best. (sorry if my grammar is bad hehe.)
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Hello! I am "Seishi_". I'm the author of this novel, who will give a shameless review on my own novel. This novel is focusing on an 18-year-old teenage man, who was forced to perform a ritual and take its risk so that he can take revenge for the killer and his allies. He will go on an adventure around the world to find each of them. As the novel progresses, we can see the main character's development throughout the story. I'll try to be consistent as possible so that you will not drop and forget this novel of my own. I would like you to support this novel. I'll always be grateful for the things you will do to support me. Thank you and always have a nice day.
So far it is good. Kinda like the idea of having good brother-sister relationship. Although it is decent, there are errors like wrong usage of punctuation marks and lack of capitalization usage. Also, you need to update as it has been 2 months since you posted the 7th chapter. It is okay to have some errors. You'll grow. Good luck and keep it up.
It is a good story with very detailed descriptions. I also like the concept that associates with the 7 sins plus a MC with an arrogant attitude. Reading a long chapter destroyed my imagination but that's my problem, it is not yours. It is completely great. Keep up on doing your novel and Good luck on your progress.