ok well I guess the transition or maybe the flow is missing something. A reader should be able to tell.

Unusual but interesting I like it

somehow chapter 2 seems like another story. maybe it should be introduced in the preceding chapters . Chapter three seemed like the actual continuation of chapter 1. but I am following this story, it's nice.👍

needs edit in last line

some editing will benefit. I think it's good otherwise. I like it.👍