It is not a 'take'.

MC starts training random civilian villagers and calls that "his clan" they all are somehow able to use "Lava release" which should be a bloodline and are just as strong as actual Shinobi who for generations have refined their bloodlines and chakra through selective breeding. I gave up when the story started mentioning a "Tsuchikage Clan" lol and yes, the name of the clan is "Tsuchikage" NOT "clan of the Tsuchikage".

"tsuchikage clan" ...this is stupid.

Random civilian gets lava release by training... <.<

is "Katonaga" a real word? Kanton = something something fire, but does Japanese even work this way?

Stupid people think this is profound.

Sh*tting on Sakura is low IQ. People just do it because they read or heard other people do it. If you really focus on the original story then Sakura was clearly above average for her age. It isn't her fault that she was put in the same team as spiritual Demi-Gods. Kakashi being a once in a generation super genius himself.

This is the problem with fanfics that follow the main story line. The OC becomes the 3rd wheel and instead of adding to the story, they make everything cringe and nonsensical. Clearly the Avatar dying or losing would just end the story right then and there, which is why the author has to prevent that by turning Tanya into an imbecile. It would have been better if this story's focus was about Tanya doing her own thing instead of making her a parasite to the original story. Making the Avatar chaise the focus of the story is the biggest mistake one can make in an Avatar fanfic.

Are you an AI learning program? No way you are human.

I like that.

teleportation is very physical.

you think it is teleportation?

That and the replacement jutsu isn't teleportation.

just telling the truth.

I don't watch kids shows and In death note they aren't talking to themselves. The story doesn't go: "Hi, Yagami Light here, today I found a death note and I wonder should I use it? I am kind of worried though, what if I am found out?" Instead its more like "3 weeks ago I found a curious book and I did this, this and this with it!" and "I will have to do some further testing to see how far its power reach." NOT "I think I should do a little test today to see how powerful the death note really is. But is this really moral? Also I wonder what I should get for breakfast and maybe I should talk to that girl at school? I have so many plans, but should I do any of them?" Garbage thoughts instead of narrating while doing.

i don't want to read this again just for a good example. All I will say is that inner thoughts should serve narrative purpose, not waste time. They shouldn't be stuff like "Hey if I do this and that then I can get this and that" or "Maybe I could get this if I do this?" instead it should be in the moment things that describe and narrate like "I could see the hatred for me in his eyes" or "I was glad to see all those years spend training weren't wasted". The more I think about it the more I am convinced that thoughts in general should be rare. You can do most of the story telling just by narrating things in small summaries like "The last few day were spend doing this" or "In the future he hoped he could do that" or "His blade narrowly missed my eye".

I see. They aren't really talking to themselves in those stories though. They are narrating. Death Note, yes there you have a lot of thoughts being voiced but there is a purpose to having those as they are directly tied to the plot and explaining what is going on. I don't think I was was talking about stuff like that in my review.

good for my dog.

lol the person that doesn't know basic history suddenly wants to talk about 'the elite'. Dude, compared to you, even my dog is 'the elite'.

So maybe one JP story that you yourself don't even remember the name of. That is not enough for generalization.