It started well, although I think it would be a little more interesting to use cards from the dark lord archetype. I think that as a dueling spirit it would be interesting to have the Dark Lord Ixchel.

Do you consider manipulating Pacifica into falling in love with Dipper? Their money and influence would be useful and in the animated series I think they should have ended up in a relationship.

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I suggest giving him Kurapika's eyes and that his ability "Emperor's Hour" allows him to use all his abilities for a limited time and of course with some risk.

wft!?

I will only say that it was a great chapter

I hope this book continues

I hope this book continues

I hope you take the time to develop a story and don't immediately OP.................... .................... ................. .................... ........... .................... ................. .................... I hope you take the time to develop a story and don't immediately OP

you know that the harem is not the right thing to do although although there may be a harem there are stories where the harem is not necessary as in this case in this type of story having more than 4 girls is honestly inappropriate

................................................................ ................................................................ ................................................................ ..........it's a great story and everything but a great harem I think it's exaggerated of course you can leave it at the beginning but then many chapters will go more to romance than the progress of the story....... ................................................................ ................................................................ ................................................................ ................................................................ .....if you think you can find a balance between romance and action I will trust you

love interest = Jewelry Bonney

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I have no criticism but I can give you some advice make sure you don't give him supernatural abilities having gojo's powers is useless to a certain extent if you don't fight as he is more focused on destroying................ ................................................................ ................................................................ ................................................................ ................................................................ ................................................ give him a system of "the best striker in the world" that of skills with perfect control that is self-explanatory or perfect aim is only a tip you can integrate the system in the first game

dsme more chapters

Is coming r 18

............................................................................................................................................................................................................................The only reason I'm not giving it 5 stars is because of how short the chapters are.....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

I hope you continue the story and instead of boxing why not one of all the martial arts and the system gives you the classic template that turned out to be baki

Keep in mind that there is a limit of powers in the combination and you can make it reach with this just a little above the human limit such as having the strength of Pickle the baki not reaching super strength but close and combinations such as psychic - fairy that evenche it's a great combination it can have a non-supernatural power like "beautiful calm" this is just something i made up; It would be to be able to maintain 100% concentration on something and that would increase its charm. about ua, although I understand what you are saying, but you must think that if the school is one made to create maximum warriors, it is possible that it participates in incidents that could risk the world such as "all for one" or the movie "world hero"

I forgive you when you make more chapters