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Ryjn

Ryjn

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2021-02-24 đã tham giaGlobal
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  • Ryjn
    Ryjn3 years ago
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    I think that the pacing is a bit too fast. It feels like the story is fragmented since it feels a bit awkward at some times, like when did she get comfortable enough to ask for help in Chapter 5-6. There's also that intimidating wall of text, maybe try to break the paragraph a few times. Aside from that, the story is good. I see some potential. Potential that I hope it will achieve someday.