John_Whall

Overall really good story, I’m just greed for more of it

I don't know where you are trying to go will this story but so far I don't think it is messed up. It's seems very well thought out and structured so I hope you can fix your plot problem soon, but if not thank you for everything you have given so far.

We jumped from dec to July???

great story thank you but what about stars and stripe the USA hero

I love your wit I find myself smirking or outright laughing ever time I read keep it up, thank you

Great concept but I’m struggling to follow along and get invested

There are two people in the house that are constantly reading everyone’s (expect MC) mind the pictures don’t need to see the light to other people have seen them and at least one if not both have been antagontised by the MC So how long before the innuendos start

Only read the first few paragraphs and I already love it. Looking at reincarnation through the eyes of someone who rightly thinks are world is one of luxury when compared to a world of live or dead

I must say you write an incredible good Luna