Flavio_Scavone

You are correct, plenty of unforgivable criminals live in Zaun, I don't understand why he didn't just kill them instead, It wouldn't be the first time he killed someone, and they wouldn't be innocent either

Bro what

The story has been nice so far, but I think you should try to separate slice of life and action you know. It felt really odd having a jjk mission in the middle of a date, and now his grandpa Is calling him again while he Is relaxing. It feels like the various scenes of the story don't have time to 'breathe' if you get what I mean. This doesn't mean that you should never make action intersect with slice of life, but him being called twice during a date, almost one chapter after the other feels a bit much, but I get why you are doing this, the only reason the original Kuze and Alya weren't together at the star was because of his insecurities, and Ryan with his confidence would basically speedrun the relationship if he wasn't interruputed Sorry for the wall of text😅

This entire thing just reeks of ChatGPT

Did you even read the story bro😭😭

Great, can't wait for the slice of life and romance to actually start, just make sure you don't burnout posting 2 chapters a day

I think they should have some doubts, not a full blown reveal however, It's too early

This chapter was fucking great, especially the ending

Nano Machine and the sequel Descent of the Demon God are part of a larger web novel universe written by the same author, so you would have to read plenty of novels just to get the lore knowledge necessary to write a good fic. As far as powerscaling goes, Nano Machine MC was able to, at the end of Descent of the Demon God, move while time was stopped and split in half an attack capable of destroying all of Asia with a sword strike, so yeah the PS goes very high

I think I popped a couple of blood vessels just from reading this chapter