Daoist59PBaE

Well, honestly? Too stupid fantasies. Completely stupid actions, and if your story was even a little like the original, he would be punished 10 times. And your intelligence agent looks more like a stupid schoolboy

well, I couldn’t force myself to read further than the first volume, the author writes about what he doesn’t understand at all, another mother’s businessman and builder, its clear for me that this is not about economics, business, construction and sociology with psychology, but why add any of this to story if you do not understand anything from this? The details are absolutely not worked out, but more like the fantasies of a beggar from Africa

well, like your hero is full of the same garbage as the main characters whom he hates, the person is the antipode for the OP of the Main Heroes, this is the one who, by his own strength and by any means, will achieve his goals, without the help of magazines, systems and other shit, otherwise here usual shit OP MS. A story in which an ordinary person without cheats and a system, because of hatred and envy for the main characters, could overthrow Momonga and capture Nazarick using any means and opportunities would be interesting, otherwise you have one trash MC against another trash MC

I hope there will be no harem, and there will be at least one MC who will truly love Hestia and give her all his attention

leave Tsunade to the usual Tsunade, make the hero an ordinary transmigrant without OP powers, even the usual knowledge of the canon sttory and an adult mind will make him quite strong, do not give him more cheats.

we are waiting for him to start using his sacred gear for orgies with a bunch of tentacles, otherwise it is unrealistic to sexually satisfy so many strong and hardy ladies

like dude what else is a normal life, you have an adult SI in a world of death? I hope your character is not a complete idiot who will go to school and waste his time. Restoration of documents I do not think that it will cost him dearly, in extreme cases, he will simply help himself with hypnosis.

The situation is far-fetched beyond measure, like what does he even care about random people? Like, do they even have any points of pressure on him? Nobody will leave the business without real reason,especially in England. Killor subdue, please, and no duel will help him avoid this attention if someone really want it. Creating false tension is not worth it, your character is acting out of character again.

don’t be stupid, maybe Hiruzen could bend under the daimyo (and then danzo should be good at controlling garbage nobles), but I highly doubt that Kiba would have any respect for any daimyo or nobles, the maximum treaty for protecting the land of fire in exchange for funding, with any attempt to impose their will on the daimyo will quickly be changed. Daimyos simply have no reason to control Konoha, as soon as the shinobi expand the pool of their activities, any possible leverage on konoha will disappear. Without power, all you have to do is praise the gods every day for surviving. And what about the daimyo alliance? (It’s very easy for Kiba to make an alliance with other Kage and replace them with more loyal daimyo who will not dig under the ninja, here the fire daimyo just brazenly tried to intimidate Kiba, but instead he hung a target for himself, because no one can tolerate such will not.

Well Kiba definitely couldn't stand it. send the Hokage as a mongrel? He must receive a very expensive bill for his mission. I doubt that Kiba would waste his Shinobi potential in fighting for a daimyo or in a low-paying job. Rather introduce and will expand mass education to many other areas of activity (medicine, construction, agriculture, science, etc.) shinobi have a lot of potential not only in military affairs. Of course, basic military training is essential in such a world, but I think it's just compulsory education in a shinobi academy for everyone, with a further choice of direction, and not throwing 12 year olds into battle.