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The chapter was a good pace, and give a good picture of the story while I was reading.

Thanks for the review. I self edit all my stuff and also it help me improve as a writer but I do reread my stuff and see the errors. I do come back and change it later on. Keep reading it. It does gets better along the way.

Lets do it.

I said west twice but the last part is the east.

The MC have a split personality so that why it was confusing. I going to explain later on. Thanks for the review.

The story have potential and how the set goal of which each character is going to have to overcome in the story and how the author did that in the story, but there is grammar errors, but every story have grammar errors. It give the author more room to improve and involve the creation of your storytelling. Keep it up author

Some words need to be capitalize. The story is great, but that old man is up something. Nice touch putting in shaman. A MC that is inbetween her sister and mother. The grandmother is more mysterious. The story gave potentials but grammar need to be corrected.

That knife and pepper spray going to be useless.

Don’t follow.🤦🏽

I don’t know what culture shaman come from but it can be build a lot of storytelling.