BattleDragon

English is not my first language so there may be grammatical errors. Therefore I apologize if there are errors.

Author, you have some way of speaking, where I can give you some suggestions as a reader of things that could be improved in the novel to make it more perfect.

I read the description but since you said that there was no NTR I entered without fear, but at least for my part that I just read the story up to where it is, the NTR part was quite strong until a little tachycardia gave me you do not consider it NTR, well, the act did not take place, but think about who would observe the entire process while they groped their girlfriend just to confirm something, not to mention that they waited until the last moment to interrupt. I thought it was that they were trying to NTR him but I stopped him before everything happened but hey my only advice to improve would be to modify that part a bit so that it is not so strong or at least that it intervenes at the same moment of the blackmail and such You see, the work improves a little more, that will have to be made some adjustments to the follow-up, but all for a perfect work.

I read the description but since you said that there was no NTR I entered without fear, but at least for my part that I just read the story up to where it is, the NTR part was quite strong until a little tachycardia gave me you do not consider it NTR, well, the act did not take place, but think about who would observe the entire process while they groped their girlfriend just to confirm something, not to mention that they waited until the last moment to interrupt. I thought it was that they were trying to NTR him but I stopped him before everything happened but hey my only advice to improve would be to modify that part a bit so that it is not so strong or at least that it intervenes at the same moment of the blackmail and such You see, the work improves a little more, that will have to be made some adjustments to the follow-up, but all for a perfect work.

Además de que pones personajes de otras regiones en kanto, y captura pokemon y se enfrenta a pokemon que no de verían salir en esta, también esta el hecho de que el pikachu recién recibido uso volá voltio, como es posible si eso lo aprende en los últimos niveles. Por mi parte digo que aunque no siga la trama debería ir de región en región y si puede que consiga uno o dos pokemon que no pertenecen a la región en la que está pero hasta ahí.

Autor tengo que decir que la descripción y las etiquetas me llamaron la atención y bueno yo hablo español que más decir, entonces empecé a leer pero pronto me desmotive por el enrredo pues para algo son las regiones y si bien puedes poner algunos pokemon de otra región no significa que pongas que en canto salen todos cuando no es así.

Author It's not for nothing but I could continue your other novel Stealing the protagonist yandere lovers that it's been about 2 months since you updated it.

Bro, it's appreciated that you keep uploading entertaining novels but could you please not leave Villain: Destiny Transfer System on hiatus, please continue it because at least I liked it and it's been about 1 month since you released any chapters.

Author, well I just want to tell you that I was going to start reading it but when I saw more or less the first chapters as it unfolds in the world of Black Bullet I decided that it was better not to read it, not because it has anything against lolis but what it did in that world was too exaggerated, not to mention that they can use dou qi in a world where it doesn't exist. And well, I also don't like fanfiction from that world simply because of the same thing that the protagonist of your novel did.

Author, don't tell me that now he forgets everything and everything because he allowed himself to be caught as a fool