Im so excited for what will happen next 😱

That's so sweet :'o

The dialogue is getting better and better and I love how the story is picking up! I can't wait to read more [img=recommend] My favourite thing will always be the way you describe the setting of the story.

That description tho :O

Thank you thank you (: Yeah I made it a bit better worded so it's not confusing haha. I appreciate your criticism

Your descriprion skills have really improved!! The fighting scene betwee Vaos and Vulcan was super entertaining to reas, but i find myself like Vulcan more (; hahah

The katana!!!!!! ah what a great weapon to introduce

The description here... Damn, I love it !!![img=recommend]

Why is Vulcan kinda daddy (;

I acrually really like how you switch POV’s here, its super smooth

Oooooh petrichor 😍😍 i kinda love that

Your writing style is really good! I like the emotions that you can feel in your writing! I think that you have potential (: I look forward to the next chapter[img=update]

Damn :.( Got me feelin bad for Brook!! I like your story and you have a strong setting and storyline :)

There were a few grammar mistakes, but none of those really matter! Your story is very captivating and draws you in. You immediately start to see through the eyes of Edward and Alexander. I really like the way that you introduce the setting and describe the scenery and atmosphere! I think if you maybe put in a bit more about what Alex is feeling or looking like (cringing or like smirking) it would be even more amazing than it already is! Damn though, I'm really excited for the next chapter :O [img=recommend][img=update]

Kinda loving Edward's attitude [img=faceslap]

I'm loving the way that you introduce the scene and setting. It's really good description and puts you in the place where they are too :o

Thank you so much!! I appreciate you reading this and your input (: My favourite is definitely Tristan as well haha