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May I ask what’s wrong or can be done better in this story, I wanna try and be better

Hi, author here. My second hand at Pokemon, hopefully much better as well. I have improved my writing a bit since the last one. Please give me some constructive criticism so that I may improve

Wait for a second, a master trainer is below and elite and champion trainer, but a master Pokemon is higher than both elite and champion? That makes no sense. If you wanted you could have made master the highest class of trainer to make it consistent because now an elite trainer will a master Pokemon and a master trainer will have a champion pokemon

The returning prisoner, whose eyes have become accustomed to the sunlight, would be blind when he re-enters the cave, just as he was when he was first exposed to the sun (516e).[2] The prisoners, according to Plato, would infer from the returning man's blindness that the journey out of the cave had harmed him and that they should not undertake a similar journey. Plato concludes that the prisoners, if they were able, would therefore reach out and kill anyone who attempted to drag them out of the cave (517a).[2] Wikipedia

Does’nt that story end with the humans being unable to accept the fact that their entire lives were a lie, and them going back into the cave, never returning to the surface because their brain couldnt comprehend what was happening?

Nope. I am serious, you can adopt if you want. Just tell me the name of the story, I am very intrested in other peoples version of my story.

Sure go for it.

This is basically a uchiha fans wet dream. But great story. Loved reading it and great potential, hope it doesn’t decline but considering the authors quality, I don’t think that will happen

Can not disclose. The only thing I can confirm that it was called “a” intentionally.

Am I the only one here who actually understood the whole Paragraph becuase i spend my free time researching abstract Advanced physics