... So... is this actually pirated from somewhere else or something? Copied the corrupted version by mistake? What the hell Webnovel?

Such a bachelor and a cheapskate. This MC still hasn't thought of *washing* the crystals. I mean, he's only made much more than a million dollars, it's not like he can afford a bottle of water. Please note, I'm not making fun of the story, I'm making fun of the MC. He's been consistently an idiot and the story is fun.

Please stop the all-caps. I mean this isn't even the system talking, it's Erik.

Please stop with the all-caps.

I really never understood the point of this part. Since the only thing (as far as I can tell) this thing does is measure exactly the number of links... and you're _already_ listing numbers... why not just say 1, 2, 3, 4, ..., 53, 54? It's just two numbers, it fully gets across all of the information (much more easily in fact), and no one has to remember anything. Or look anything up.

You could ask Webnovel to get off their butts and code up support for spoiler boxes that can be expanded/collapsed. Seems like all the problem is because Webnovel is not designed for writing, leaving feedback, rating, reviewing, or even reading for that matter. (Yes all of those things can be done but they're terrible implementations)

"Blackguards" should be capitalized here. (to be consistent with next paragraph)

According to chapter 1: Ferebitz scale is for amount of mana. Idor scale is for number of links. Previous paragraph said Ferebitz scale... which *implies* this paragraph is still talking about that, but you mention increasing links. Should prev paragraph say Idor instead of Ferebitz? Or was there a topic change between these two paragraphs?

Please don't do this. Having system words inside brackets.. like [This is what the system says] is plenty. It is much harder for people to read anything that is written in all caps. Part of how people read words intrinsically has to do with the different shapes of the letters in the words/shapes of the words. By making everything caps, everything becomes more uniform. It literally means people have to spend more effort to read and will read slower. Some people will simply skip everything. It's reasonable, for example, if there was a plot point... System not fully functional and is too "loud" in the MC's head.. but once that's solved it should revert to standard writing. If you really want it to be weird writing, and you don't have fonts available (Not sure how bad Webnovel is), go ahead and make the first letter of every word capitalized... but not the whole thing. Please.

How could you possibly know anything was holding you back? Based on how quickly you improved here (including just by "playing around", and "a tiny bit of exercise"), it's clear you haven't actually tried anything yet to improve.

This story reuses an enormous number of tropes and situations from similar novels across multiple genres. That's not a problem. The problem is that the author keeps importing things and makes it seem as if they're taking it without understanding the point of it or why it made sense. In the first five-six chapters, nearly all facts we're told are wrong/turn out to be lies/inconsistent. The numbers don't mean anything and don't matter. We're told how hard this person tried to train over six years but didn't get any better... and later we see that a little bit of running is more than he's done in the the entire six years. We're told he tried to improve his skill and could never improve it... but a single day improved it multiple times. Everyone is scared by a low-level beast, but then is happy and sure they can kill it when they find out it's a high-level beast. A tiger is more than five stories tall, but dodging a paw leaves you close enough to the face to attack it. The MC has lived through this and been ostracized and treated unfairly for six years... but is surprised and shocked trying to figure out what they did to deserve someone bullying them... It's not that the MC is railing against the unfairness (understandable), but literally fails to understand what they did to offend the other person... when they've been living for six years having this happen ALL THE TIME. I understand not having an overarching plan for the entire story, but how about re-reading what you wrote, or looking at two paragraphs next to each other and having them be consistent? Two stars for writing quality since the grammar is decent. Webnovel won't let you post a review unless you rate all 5 categories. I can't comment on Stability of Updates or Story Development as it's too early but I still wanted to review. So left them in the middle.

Is there *anything* the author tells us that we can trust? It's frustrating when nearly all the details we've been told are proven to be incorrect/contradicted almost immediately/just don't make sense. Who cares about the mana? We've been told multiple times his mana is effectively infinite or redundant as his body always gives up first. Why mention the mana at all?

I hate translations never being specific. If his defense spell is immunity to <= C, then he should just go straight to the C dungeon. He could farm it enough and maybe even get B-rank skills if he's lucky. Especially if he's worried about the other person. If it's immunity to < C then farming D makes sense. Also I don't understand why he doesn't have all 3 of his defense spells running all night while asleep.

Clearly a fake review. Not surprised Webnovel does this.

The story is readable and (usually) understandable, but the TL team clearly doesn't have an editor nor do they use even free tools. There are tons of (free) spellcheckers and grammar checkers. I don't know if it's the TL or the Author, but it's pretty clear that the numbers don't matter. I hate bait and switch "systems" like this. Don't include numbers if they're meaningless. I like numeric systems, but clearly they don't matter here. Also Webnovel, you are terrible. I don't have an opinion on stability of updates, OBVIOUSLY, because I'm reading the backlog. Don't *FORCE* us to rate all five fields before we can post a review. Your platform is almost impossible to read on, you *can* pay, but you can't use anything you buy unless you use your (unusable) mobile app. You used to work on web browser but...

"she took a step back. back and got closer to leo." << multiple mistakes. "back. back" => "back" It's clear they don't provide editors but Google Docs and Grammarly are free. Grammar and spell checkers are automatic and fairly decent. Also Webnovel's UI is terrible for providing feedback about errors.

"to less. of 1%." => "to less than 1%." Delete the extra period. So I take it Webnovel doesn't hire editors?

Typo. "He probably will. be the only" delete the period.

Grammer issues. ", Anna graduated from high school at Bronze 2 Stars, ..." or ", Anna graduated at Bronze 2 Stars from high school, ..." What *you* wrote means her high school was named "Bronze 2 Stars" or that her high school was rated Bronze 2 stars (as opposed to her being at bronze 2 star strength when she graduated)

Mistake in (probably) TL/editing here. What you said here was: it wasn't luxury but it also wasn't expensive. Which is redundant and clearly NOT what you were going for based on context. What you probably wanted was: While Adidas clothing wasn't luxury clothing, it wasn't clothing that everyone could afford either, ... Which would make it "not luxury but not cheap" or "not luxury but still expensive" / ...