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It's all good we're all grinding irl lol. One only becomes a great writer through experimentation and feedback from fans, also i get you're doing this because you love it but I'll suggest you make a p@t or something, just take a break and stock up about 10~15 chps so anyone that wants to support you will do so, because however little the support is, it'll still be some sort motivation.
Alright, it's been a long time since I wrote a review, but I decided to write one after reading your last chp. I have read a lot of football fics both good and bad and I'm an avid football fan myself, heck I'm even working on a football ff rn (though it's a translation) and based on that I can tell you you're doing a good job so far, but there are places you could improve in my opinion, romance is good and all but make sure you don't let it be the main point of your book, it should be there once in a while, also the subheadings you use at time mid chapter like; "Minute 56", "La Liga new season" could be avoided I don't know about other but personally it ruins my immersion a bit. Another main thing is it's a bit fast-paced, like I'm not saying the mc should be nerfed or anything but take the plot more slowly your matches while they're nice, they just feel like summarization at times, mind you this isn't a bad thing but this should only be used for low end fixtures or when you need to speed things up, but big matches should be fleshed out more. I don’t know how many chapters you have in mind for this book, but you certainly need to slow the plot down a bit to make the book more immersive imo. Also, even though he has Kroos and Nedved ability don’t make him win the B'dor in his first season. Trust me, it'll make the coming plots a bit redundant. There are countless other awards that can showcase his talent for the time being. I think that's all I have to say. Best of luck on your endeavour in this work because it is truly a good book. Have a nice day.
Okay this is gold 😂
Yeah
Are you back man?
It's Gao Shen Idolism that's acting up, he respects Sir too much.