Fredmoney07

so you just made a pervert doom. lame as sh it

you said he was gonna be a better doom..... but then after every sentence you have some arrogant as s thing like "because doom deserves the best blah blah"

this shi t is lame. multiple wives was what started the faiths uprising. the shi t jaehaerys signs was so he could bang sisters. this whole story has such flowery as s speech. "they looked in to eachothers eyes and just understood each other" ga y as s

this whole story up to this point would only be 2 chapters if you removed all your yapping. i swear to god if i have to read another thing about a pathway looking nice. or how deliberate gestures blah blah blah.

you yap on and on about random unimportant garbage, "his thoughts were precise and humble" "beautiful pathway.....going down this great pathway" yap yap yap

what stupid ass shit. just train. why would you want to make an enemy this early. youre a grown up. act like it. and you have been laying in bed and your acting like youre already a badass or something

you said you werent going to share magic... now youre going to make some faction. lame

voldy isnt the greatest anything.... he couldnt even conquer 1 little island grindlewald almost took over the world.

just answer how many chapters before he turns into a phoenix infront of ppl? so i can come back then.

booooooooo