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How long is this epic of the virtual world going to last? to be honest, I would like to skip it and return to reading dxd

If you gave your character even a little bit of emotional maturity, then the story would become 20 percent more interesting. But I understand it would be more difficult for you to copy-paste the original.

Why is he itching all over? When you write all this, aren't you ashamed? I feel ashamed when I read this. ¯\_(ツ)_/

I've been waiting for the day when someone will finish the fanfiction on "date a live" for a long time, so I don't want to give a fair 1-star rating. There is a lot of unnecessary text describing things, a scanty amount of dialogues and character interactions, the protagonist is so empty that you want to put the original character back in his place, there is no depth at all in the story. To be honest, there is a feeling that this is written using a neural network. But this is the impression of the first 8 chapters, I just hope the author will grow above himself and put at least a little more effort into his story.

I noticed that the author really likes to insert whole pieces of the story from the original book. So the desire to keep the narrative the same is extremely logical for the author. ദ്ദി( ̀ ᴗ ✧)

You seem to have missed a few chapters.

Against gloomy realism. I read fan fiction for the sake of immersing myself in a dream.

To be honest, it's terrible. The incoherent hasty narration makes you sympathize with the author and wonder if he is in a fever. However, maybe this will change by the later chapters, I want to treat such authors positively and believe in their growth above themselves, I could only withstand 15 chapters. I'm putting a triple as a support.

Are there really people who care about this? ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

It’s so strange that people living in a world where physical condition does not equal strength still continue to think in these terms. On the other hand, an adventurer must be adventurous. ദ്ദി ̀ ᴗ ✧