I have a vacation sometime at the end of june so i planned to go back and do my best to fix it

Thanks for the review! I know it isnt that great as i am still new to writing and this is just something I enjoy doing in my free time. In the later chapters I did start trying to add character remarks when they are speaking. I had complaints about it in the past so i was trying something new at the beginning but i can see where the confusion comes from. Also the main reason why the characters pretty much forgot the painful things they went through is cause like what happens with trauma sometimes their minds just suppressed and blocked it out. I wanted it to also make it seem like the bloodline they got is sort of changing the way they think or feel like becoming more arrogant or temperamental.

I'm not the best at writing since this is only the 2nd serious thing I've written but thanks for reading and i hope you like it [img=recommend]

i didnt think it would need one.

I am unsure if i will add romance later.

Thank you for letting me know. I can go back to framing the names. I just thought it broke the flow of writing.

Hello Im here for the mandatory author review. This is my first time writing anything other than a school paper so if you have any tips or anything please do leave a comment. I hope you all enjoy it! [img=recommend]

so far its been very good, i hope it continues

This chapter is very similar to a chapter of supreme magus. Like even the name of the main character and the name of the world were copied for a couple sentences.

I like the story, its very interesting and pretty fun but the world building is pretty nonexistent. They start talking about the classes of different creatures but its not explained properly. I couldnt tell if an iron class was worse than bronze or if a magister was which class.

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the synopsis made me so excited for this book, I really hope it's as good as it sounds! Now all I need is chapters to read so I can really enjoy it

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