byTraaq

This is after Harry’s story?

Not sure if I’m too late or not, but I saw this house in a Wednesday FF. Gives off magical vibes with it being too wonky like Weasley’s or Lovegoods houses.

Probably a bit too late, but shouldn’t it be more of anything? Like more intelligence, more luck, etc.. Or maybe that could be the awakened powers?

Curving bullets from Wanted would be cool. Might have to make sure own gun and bullets though.

Not sure which ones trying to be conveyed, but I view stories as the top of a roof (2 stories = 2 roofs) and floors as well, the floors (2nd floor = 1 roof).

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Before you go any further with Demonio Fluer, you should check out “What Everyone Gets Wrong About Demonio” by GrandLineReview on YouTube. It basically says it’s her awakening and her desire to become the demon child she was always called. In your story she was never called a demon child, so what would your Robin want to become for Rob?

Maybe make Gryphons for the other healers and make a traveling doctor organization?

Grammar is much better than your last one so keep it up! Only current issues I’m seeing is you confuse male vs female sometimes and you don’t add quotation marks (“) if there’s 2 separate spoke sentences in a single paragraph.