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this scene Ruins immerssion by not properly scaling power levels how is he able to do all of this environmental Damage from just screaming? Shaking my head makes no sense
your a great author
your doing Great man
i admit i really love your story but its truly hard not to take offense to many of the stereotypes the main character describes i csnt refute them because honestly its has a semblance of accuracy however i admit it feels extremly uncomfortable to read how a main character is openly racist to almost every other foreigner in the world and belive themselves to be a member of the most cunning and secure striving race ok the planet that being said every other aspect of this story Is truly good
You dont know who the mc was before hand and killing someone doesnt instanky make you “messed up” does that mean war Heros or people who kill theyre abuses are suddenly messed up? Nah theres a plethora of situations were killing someone is Either they only option or the smartest option
Your confusing the mc wIth danny phantom and THATS your problem hes no danny he just has his abilities
honestly im surprised by the quality i felt i had to leave a review because of it so to start out your introductory phase Present the oc wAs well done but could have been more smoothly transitioned In the future you should think About adding a dash of foreshadowing it could be An exemplary component to your writing style your description pf the character was well done not too many details but just enough to Give they imagination a push in the right direction i think you should consider a bit Of originality in regards to his meta abilities its clear you like wolverine but another ability to help support his claws and regen couldnt hirt as long as its not op i would think About giving him something to help even the playing field down the line against people like super man or black adam maybe something along the lines of slowly growing physical strength attribute similar to one for all or zenkai boost thats All i can think of for now if theres anything else ill Come back
Honestly i dont mind giving unboased reviwes however i feel its neccessary to state that unless you put out AT LEAST 5-10 chapters most people wont be willing to give the reviews you want because it could get dropped so whats even the point? To Get you have to give this is common knowledge ill stick around to see if you head my advice or not and leave a revIew every chapter STARTING at the 5th chapter
Is this ever going to turn into am actual piece of work or will you hust keep deleting chapters and remaking it? at first i was fully on bosrd with support but now this Just feels like your goofing around with no real interest in whst your doing i wanna stick around but im gonna have to drop if more chapters dont come soon
His lack of care for death and killing make Him a far more interesting character than Danny
The portrayal of each character and side character vIlains included is done extremely well nearly flawless in extremely impressed please stay true to yourself and dont be mis guided by comments at the very least dont kill the story by ruining immersion and making him submissive all if a sudden weve seen thats not his mindset he has no qualms with killing nor should he if anything ive always felt batman and sups were more than a bit hypocritical in both their actions and philosophy anyways your getting all my Power stones please Keep producing such winderful work its very hard to find talented writers these days