Riki_Abdurahim

Happy writing 👍

Also, you can have dimensional travel, maybe after light became the god of the new world. if you have him travel early, your story will be divided. one in this world and another. it will be difficult to manage.

you already have it man 😀 Death : Light (Kira) Famine : Misa War : Balalaika Conquest :Makima Pestilence : Suguru This is a good cast. Balalaika is great. you dont have to change her. just make her have all the power from the original black lagoo. Hell, can even merge the two world (black lagoo and death note) into one. And dont forget about Teru 'delete' Mikami. maybe he will have a place in kira's organization too. You can also give L a little help. cant make light have all the fun 😅 maybe give the wammy's house a time to shine. you can bring Near and mello early in the story if L's position become dire. with that you can have OC from the wammy's house, chasing kira's organization and his horseman, meanwhile L and Light working together to catch Kira. as for the name of the organization you can name it 'Novus Mundi'. since you already have that deus novi mundi in the story. or you can name it Saisei, which mean rebirth in japanese. there is a lot of option 😅

no problem. Take your time 👍

Good chapter 😀 Makima has enter the scene. a little sugestion. Maybe you can expand the world by giving multiple POV for important character. But not all of them per se. Maybe giving a general POV for ordinary people's reaction. what they think of kira. Supporter or not. If kira cult has formed, maybe giving them a doctrine or something. or even the inner working of the organization that kira want to build. with that, you expand the story.

Good 👍 Exelent start for the fic, btw.

Personally i like the mind game and wild goose chase of light and kira. i really doesnt care about the supernatural. building light an organization is also a good idea, make him more of a puppet master than the original kira. as for makima, just make a 2 person harem (misa, makima) for him and called it a day [img=recommend][img=recommend]

i stop reading when the author introduce another reincarnator. now we have a new reincarnated individual that seemingly an enemy to mc. sigh... well its good while it lasted.

oh boy, a stargate fanfic. i really like what you did in this story. using all of his knowledge to his advantage. its really entertaining. good job.

its pretty good overall, not perfect. but the adventure of a madlad six is entertaining [img=recommend]i just hope there is more faction building or kingdom building in the story