That's really a passionate chap you'd make author kun. Keep up the good work, there's some error but it was understandable so it's fine

Hi! hello! nice knowing you I guess? ehehe I'm a fan of your book ehehe my advice for you hmmm... If needed, be clear on what's happening in the actual scene just put your imagination into it and also look for grammatical errors, spellings and always look for a reference when you are having a hard time that's all I can say, I hope it may help you :))))