rorschach

again I don't want to ruin your enthusiasm about writing. It's great you took the initiative. There are issues, i said it. Anyone would. So should learn to take criticism positively.

hence the criticism. you were the one who basically said "go read chinese mtl and let your brain rot. who wastes word count on scene building"? why are you acting like it's my fault or something? you were the one who started it, going off on tangent and can't take criticism...

oh and by the way, yours is not much better than those chinese novels you like to quote.

lol, it's called building a scene, adding to the reader's visualization. I don't need to know who made the wall, but i would very much like to know how tall the building was, what the view was like, where the assassins were located (3 of them), what was the lighting condition. Was it shadowed, a little dark? what is it? If you had put a portion of the effort you wasted quoting chinese this chinese that, to actually build a proper scene, the novel would have been a joy to read. But "no i won't put any efforts, i will have chatgpt do my work." Sure go ahead. Be my guest. Who am I to judge? i am simply a critique.

too many finally s..

sure it did. of all the places in gotham, he happened to run into the wayne family, just as they are going to be murdered...

now why is he omly afraid now? didn't he see he just folded and threw the metal door as if it was paper? isn't that something to be afraid of? he has to wait till he fired bullets?

fucking hell... she would go on to wipe out an entire island full of mutants..!!?

is this possible? for mps, no one else from family are allowed into politics right??

ugh didi is a modern word.. these inconsistencies keep breaking the immersion. hopefully you will correct these...