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You can't put the blame on "the MC didn't think that far ahead" and in the next chapter make up an excuse that the MC was going to have the accident instead of his car. That was clearly your mistake as the one who makes the decisions in the story, the MC is just some words you put on paper.
Yes, I know you haven't thought this far ahead, that's why I comment on these things. As a reader, what I hope is that you as an author care about these details so that the immersion isn't broken, or that the MC just seems like someone who doesn't think about anything and only does things right when the System uses meta knowledge to make him never make a mistake. I'm an author too, and I understand your side of thinking that I'm just being annoying by criticizing your story, but think about it from my side, the system literally serves to make the MC a good husband, then the MC leaves his car for his wife to drive and gets into an accident instead of him and he gets rewarded for it?
I liked the way it ended and can see what you are trying to do, just the excuse could be better. Expensive cars have a lot of annoying allerts when you don't charge or fill it, he forgetting to fill or charge his car isn't the best excuse as something like this will be almost impossible to happen, even more with his AI, maybe a flat tire will work better