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Martial_Pursuit

Martial_Pursuit

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2020-10-07 đã tham giaGlobal
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  • Martial_Pursuit
    Martial_Pursuit3 days ago
    trả lời Anonny_Anonymous

    What bullshit are you on about, British colonialism bring plenty of race from the colonies to London. Are you purposely stupid or just a fucking Yank.

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    Martial_Pursuit3 days ago
     công bố

    Story, writing is rather average but good enough for the story to be enjoyable, unfortunately the way the character act and react are too modern which lead to the character seems odd. It's the modern word that made me unable to be immersed in the story. Not my cup of tea but that may be enjoyable to others

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    Martial_Pursuit2 months ago
    trả lời Bill_Smith_2424

    About the canon or this fanfic?, my comment is about the legitimacy of Uzu destruction is by coalition of Kumo, Iwa and Kiri.

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    Martial_Pursuit2 months ago
    trả lời SpiritFest13

    majority of us know that system equal strong faster. Limit the function of the system so it's going to Make the story has more tension. My gripe with dungeon is making the character OP too quickly are use it's as a reason why the character growth is slowed down since the dungeon is difficult. Personally if I had to keep the dungeon use it as a training ground to increased his skill or a safe haven to pop in and out like you wrote when he fought the enemies rather than having to farm xp there. Look man it's your story write it however you feel like it, to me the character are out of character and shallower than the original but that just me, do what ever you want with the story.

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    Martial_Pursuit2 months ago
    trả lời _DaoOfReading_

    Because translator pick trash over quality fanfic.

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    Martial_Pursuit2 months ago
     công bố

    Chinese fanfic, the quality is so low they are borderline courting death. The story has no tension with how OP the character are. Personally to the translator you might as well take the story and rewrite it. Take the bare bones of the original story and makes your own with a strong MC rather than an OP one. OP MC needs a well written story and I doubt the original book could done it.

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    Martial_Pursuit2 months ago
     công bố

    Writing is very juvenile, main character aren't focus enough, most words are stats screen. Should have a single page about the stat and only show relevant information about the stats not the entire of it etc SPD is Lvl up by one point. Lvl up, new skill One style sword The usage of dungeon ruined the growth of the character.

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    Martial_Pursuit2 months ago
    trả lời Jhan_Otha_Ginting

    That requires good writing.

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    Martial_Pursuit2 months ago
     công bố

    Good just not enough, the name I could ignore but the story flow is odd. The MC arrogance, the telling rather than showing during combat and how characters interacting is odd. Since it's set in Ippo universe during the late 90's and with MC being half Japanese there's should be conflict around how he behaves and with being a Hafu that would makes the world feel more alive. Not my cup of tea and won't continue reading it but keep up your work.

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    Martial_Pursuit2 months ago
    trả lời Randomguy22344

    Then use Romani name or an Irish one to reflect the character ancestry.