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AuHNG

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2018-05-13 đã tham giaGlobal
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG3mth
     công bố

    The story really be storying guys. reviews are difficult to write let me just write random stuff here. There we go, hopefully this works well.

    altalt
    I'M NOT THE ICE QUEEN
    Kỳ huyễn · TheCraZyaUthOr19
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG3mth
     công bố

    The plot is developing, but I would suggest working a bit on the writing quality. Use grammarly or other grammar checkers to catch minor mistakes or something, because sometimes it can be difficult to notice on a fist read.

    altalt
    Return of the Ancient Constellation
    Kỳ huyễn · Choka
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG3mth
     công bố

    There's potential, but I'm not the audience. I think you should look towards other authors in the genre and see what they do. Ok, that's all.

    altalt
    The Devil's Fiance Is The Alpha's Mate
    LGBT+ · Pinkyprincess
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
    bình luận

    I keep editing stuff and my paragraph comments disappear.

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    NPC Website
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
     công bố

    Ignore the reading status, I went back to reread. This story has a lot of potential, though it doesn't develop the stakes immediately, and is a bit more of a mystery when it comes down to it. Looking forward to reading more.

    altalt
    The Undying Star
    Kỳ huyễn · daniz_
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
    bình luận

    Read the prologues first.

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    altalt
    NPC Website
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
    trả lời daniz_

    Thats the first chapter, not the first chapter of the novel. Damn it, I hate how webnovel skips over the prologues.

    altalt
    NPC Website
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
    trả lời daniz_

    Let me know what do u mean by beginning? Like prologue or chapter 1? I think people tend to find chapter 1 confusing when they accidentally skip the prologues.

    altalt
    NPC Website
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
    trả lời AuHNG

    Alright so here’s my critique: chapter kind of reads like AI, cause every chapter ends with a: and so the hero’s embark once more tupa stuff. Remove that, and just end the chapter on a cliffhanger.

    altalt
    System Mania!
    Kỳ huyễn · Sinadin_2ndth
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
     công bố

    So far, it’s really good, although I do have to say that the chapter starts of a bit grizzly for any of y’all that aren’t super into that. Gonna continue reading this novel and post my final thoughts on this review.

    altalt
    System Mania!
    Kỳ huyễn · Sinadin_2ndth
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
    bình luận

    fight.

    Ch 29 THE SCHOOL MAKES FRESHMEN FIGHT: [Press Y to find out WHY]
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
    bình luận
    Ch 30 EQUIPPED 'Shovel'! THE BULL IS BACK!
    altalt
    NPC Website
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
    bình luận

    flute

    Ch 31 TO DO: 1. COOK a POT 2. BUY a FLUTE
    altalt
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
    bình luận

    pot.

    Ch 31 TO DO: 1. COOK a POT 2. BUY a FLUTE
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
    bình luận
    Đoạn này đã bị xóa
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    NPC Website
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
    bình luận
    Đoạn này đã bị xóa
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
    bình luận
    Ch 33 MY DANCE PARTNER IS THE WIND
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
    bình luận
    Ch 33 MY DANCE PARTNER IS THE WIND
    altalt
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  • AuHNG
    AuHNG8mth
    bình luận
    Ch 33 MY DANCE PARTNER IS THE WIND
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