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pffft. This statement is a fallacy. All the bear suit did was multiply her base stats to an absurd degree. If she awakens like Chloe the bear suit powers would apply to newly awakened status as well. She basically has the same potential as Rimuru just from a different angle. Especially if she figures out how to turn off the ability she got from the suit in order to grind her base stats with some hard work.
aaah my biggest problem here is I completely lost like the next 20 chapters of the story somehow. I have to rewrite them.
it's selective. she remembers being a man. she remembers naruto was a story and the general gist of it but all the major events were blotted out instead. which means basic world knowledge is there but no plot.
like I said inconsistencies over the entirety of the academy time in Naruto. because if that were true and it was an early graduation sasuke would have graduated early.
That was most definitely not the Hokage outfit. Minato wore the basic jonin outfit similar to kakashi except with a personalized haori with flames on it that said 4th on the back. If you dont believe me look at what the third wears. Those are the Hokage specific clothes. and he wore them over his armor.
This is from Hikari's point of view even if it's third person and therefore her opinion about someone. You need to look at the context of what you're reading.
naruto started at 6 in canon and was said to have started 2 years early. pretty sure that's all the proof you need for am actual starting age. If you actually piece that information together with the fact her failed the graduation exam twice and had to repeat the final year twice youd realize that means Naruto has inconsistencies in it's own canon surrounding the academy.
yeah and your point? Minato was the one who wore a flame patterned Haori no Kushina.
I corrected a few spots. If you don't like or care for them I'll stop. I just feel like you are a passionate writer by how much you've done and if you ever decide to write your own original you'll need to have such corrections. Story is interesting though. That said I feel like you're borderline breaking it. Gym leaders use teams based off the experience of the trainers that face them. Since you can't actually own or do trainer activities till you're age 10 when approaching a gym for the first time at the actual age she is at for having had her Pokemon so long she'd most likely be accused of cheating. Upon clearing that up. Breaking the law, with the Professor being complicit in allowing someone not of age to own and train her own Pokemon. These are things you need to keep in mind if you ever write your own original creation. That once you create certain rules they need to be followed. In this instance the world your writing for already has these pre established and as a fanfiction you can ignore them since readers for this generally dont care. The same will not be said when your work gets professional critique for publication.