you need some actual progress each chapter

needs better description when fighting hand to hand so we can see he's using bang's martial arts

put the periods in ..........

I hate these types of stories

bet ur gonna wish u read the rest of the novel

Kushina

it has a r18 tag is it real or just clickbait bcs chinese novels don't have smut

disgusting

use grammarly to at least fix the grammar a little bit

already added

it's decent but it's mostly just unfinished lemons it feels like I'm being blueballed

if you came into this expecting too make straight from the start then ur wrong others have gained experience for one or two years of writing and gaining fans before the results really show two months isn't a long time

your prices are too high for how much you write in each chapter and better writers aren't that expensive and write more

bro he doesn't owe them anything

make the twins from atomic heart

the chapters are too short

I don't understand why everytime this scene where the characters is invited they don't just say for her to come to them if they want something

The author here, this is my first time writing and I know it isn't perfect. If you want to, comment some suggestions on how I can improve my writing. I will be deleting one-star reviews since I know I at least try to write dramatically correct compared to many of the stories here.

really?with the Wayne's influence he shouldn't worry about that especially when other people easily get away with worse things

so he's not going to kill hades