Hopps

hmm I have read this before... fanfic.net maybe? it was a different title though, I still remember portions of that story. I'll see if it's the same through continuing

Re read this paragraph, haki. There seems to be too many of a certain word, haki. Come back to me once you ha e figured which was too many...haki

My god, seriously SHUT THE FUDGE UP! Do SOMETHING!! Seriously the internal monologues in these is waaaaay too long.

Exactly what I said after I read that last paragraph...

My man you don't need to go into this much detail about an event that happened only a couple chapters ago, simplify or just focus on the reaction of the characters outside of this event. You are wasting pages and time doing this. it's unnecessary and serves only for people to skip paragraphs. PS it Is BORING!

Didn't they literally break the dimension during the fight in the 'new' movie.

Just a reminder, when writing, PLEASE read all your chapters, or at least skim through them. From chapter 1 to now, the amount of 'disrespect' that has been shown towards the MC is FAR too much. you've written an especially prideful MC, someone who won't take disrespect lying down, so him taking this much, and the retaliation being, him being pouty, just makes him look like... Well no other words to put it a simp and a bitxhe. It's off putting to read, unless you are already into that sort of thing. I'll give this a couple more chapters, I hope it improves, but as of now, starting to hit my limit.

Hmm feels like the pot calling the kettle black here...

lol cmon bro, just go with it, no need to pull out a PHD, so long as it is 'plausible'... which this is Marvel so I guess anything is plausible lol.

Well, that was quite a... not gonna lie, boring chapter, nothing really hooking me with these characters. Like seriously. If in stories, there is 'A' Plot, and 'B' Plot. Reading this felt like reading the 'Z' Plot, dialogue between faceless background characters that shouldn't be getting focused on right now. It will probably culminate to a payoff, but my guy, the destination to get there is getting long and kinda boring. We need to start picking up the pace with your MC at this point. But I guess that's the payoff with chapter by chapter releases, we won't see the full picture of what you are doing till probably 10 chapters more.Anyways Thank you for the chapter and hopefully you take this LONG comment the right way. Just merely providing feedback based on my current mood atm.