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AbyssVentus

AbyssVentus

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  • AbyssVentus
    AbyssVentus2yr
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    mate please, look up the correct moves please don't name them yourself. Oh, by the way its a shiny gastly

    Chương này đã bị xóa
    MI AVENTURA POKEMON
    Tranh châm biếm · AngelVillalobos288
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    I feel like you have written this in third person point of view

    Ch 23 Orochimaru
    Naruto: Mekka Junrei
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    Start of every fan fic, cant you choose another place

    his parents got Married in Kalos, then moved to Kanto... guess where... Yes! the Pallet town.
    Pokemon: A New Journey (Up for adoption)
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    Osiris is also the god of the underworld

    From Osiris I had gained the Authority of Life, granting me a regeneration capable of healing me from the most brutal of injuries and the power to heal others from wound or disease.
    The Campione of Marvel!
    Phim ảnh · GabrielRott
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    1. Starter: Tyranitar (Rock/Dark) - Land Powerhouse 2. Houndoom (Fire/Dark) 3. Hydreigon (Dark/Dragon) - Air Powerhouse 4. Greninja (Water/Dark) - Speed 5. Drapion (Dark/Poison) - Defence 6. Absol or Umbreon (Dark) - Always out

    Ch 6 Poll for team comfirmation.
    Pokemon: Prince of Darkness
    Tranh châm biếm · Ethereal_Writer
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    When will his starter hatch from its egg?

    Ch 21 CHAPTER 20: SAMSON OAK
    Pokemon: Creation and Adventures
    Tranh châm biếm · Jogarp
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    I don't understand that last sentence?

    "It is not normal for Alec to have been able to feel the emotions of the ninetales at such a distant distance, besides those images he saw, he would understand if it were some psychic pokemon, but Alola ninetales is not this case..., *sigh*, Professor Nirio, what is what you did with Alec?"
    Pokemon: Creation and Adventures
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    Stop using "she"

    Thus, Alec became the housewife when she was in the professor's house, and his brilliant apprentice when she was in the laboratory.
    Pokemon: Creation and Adventures
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    sharingan mate get it right

      The first thing Tang Hao saw was Tang Zuo's Shalunyan. He felt a terrible aura in it, like a demon. Tang Hao used his soul power to see the true face of this Shalunyan. Item.
    The Scarlet Demon Doulo Dalu
    Tranh châm biếm · dominant
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    Powerhouses: Salamance, Tyranitar Tanks: Blastoise, Aggron Support: Gardevoir, Roserade All Rounders: Gengar, Krookodile

    Ch 1 Future Line Up
    Wretched Fates (Pokemon Fanfic)
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    to OP should of made it Water Dragon Or Lightning Dragon instead

    [Devil Fruit: Mythical Zoan: Dragon Type: Dragon God]
    Into One Piece
    Tranh châm biếm · Dark_Vader98
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    Overall, it is a good story, but is your MC gender challenged? If not and he is a male use the words he or sorcerer which implies that he is a male. If your MC is a female call her something else not Ron and use she or Sorceress.

    Ch 4 4. Advertise on the board
    A Witcher Tale: Ron Aydesson
    Diễn sinh tác phẩm · Aydehan
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    a male is called a sorcerer and a female is called a sorceress, I am guessing your Main character is gender challenged?

    Ron would explode when he heard those words. He was finally graduating from Ban Art Sorceress school and eagerly awaiting the next words.
    A Witcher Tale: Ron Aydesson
    Diễn sinh tác phẩm · Aydehan
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    Translation

    Ch 1 1
    REINCARNATED IN NARUTO WORLD : WITH SYSTEM
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    I think seperate it into two different magics for basic magic Storm God Slayer & Storm Devil Slayer Than call it Storm Demonic God Slayer Magic as a fusion

    [A/N: Ideas on what to call it?]
    Fairy Tail: Eye of the Storm
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    Please don't make him her slave this is getting repetitive with him constantly losing. He is a Demi-GOD with MAGIC he should at least be able to get out of these sort of situations.

    Ch 18 Chapter 17
    Creating A New Legend
    Diễn sinh tác phẩm · Azazyel
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    You should mention a Mandibuzz and Braviery, to avoid confusion.

    Meanwhile, the egg that Bill had gifted to Tommy hatched shortly after the battle. Turned out, it was an egg of a Mandibuzz, a dark and flying type pokemon from Unova region.
    Monsters in my Pocket
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    Instant mastery is too OP, you should Nerf it to 10x mastery instead. Otherwise it will be hard for your story to go past 20 chapters because it will be to boring to read.

    Ch 2 Chapter 2: A New Start
    Fairy Tail: Cherry Blossoms
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    Why does the king have a Chinese name and the rest English names?

    Ch 4 A Gun!
    The Golden Throne
    Kỳ huyễn · jdbeue
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    AbyssVentus2yr
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    Maybe you should check out the Pokédex before writing to avoid confusion when choosing Pokemon. I am still confused is the Pokemon a Vullaby (Dark/Flying) or a Rufflet (Normal/Flying). Please make it clear!

    Ch 2 Chapter 2
    Monsters in my Pocket
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