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I felt it was information that should have been told in the story itself. Author's notes mid-story always break the rhythm.
This author's note shouldn't be here, and that information should be told narratively.
How does he not notice a giant dude running at him while inside a room with them?
So much cringe.
I mean, even in canon chakra isn't something native to the humans of Naruto. It was first spread by Hagoromo. Sure, pretty much everyone has it by the time the story takes place, given however many generations later, but the point remains that "no chakra" was the natural state and it isn't a stretch that the occasional person wouldn't inherit the magic juice.
This kind of anomaly is EXACTLY the type of thing a soldier would tell his superior. Especially given that Minato doesn't know what "it" was, and it's in their village.
Hopefully the longer time between updates will result in a higher quality.
What was the point of this?
If turning off "speech-mode" was an option he already knew about, why wasn't it already off?
All that means is that he would survive his maiming. I don't know about you, but I certainly wouldn't enjoy eternity without limbs. Or a penis.
Why is his fire considered separate from his Dragon-based quirk? Would it not make more sense for it to be umbrella'd under the "Dragon" theme? Just seems weird.
Holy crap. This story went from "promising" to "dumpster fire" super quick. Now he's the heir to everything. What's the point? He's already what amounts to an SI with meta knowledge, this just means instead of reading an interesting story about them making a place for themselves everything is handed to him effortlessly.
Sad you can't even contrive a reason for Nawaki's death beyond "HERP DERP, PEDO-BEAR OROCHI!~"
I don't really buy this. He's eleven, and she's (supposedly) a competent teacher. Can't really see her letting some kid go off on his own with no guardian. Especially when a skeevy (read:dangerous) place like Kockturn Alley is literally just a wrong turn away.
How would he know if the people he's stealing from are annoying or assholes if they're just randoms walking by? You already established that you don't know how to read minds yet. The "moral compass" thing sounds a bit weak when you just claim to be stealing from whoever happened to be walking past you at the time.