NxtDoorDuDE
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Tony is still young and didn't see New York time nuke...
what should I say... Starting of story was good but gone down to drain later. I mean a planet level inflated to universe level. And it's inflated very fast in fight with marines was alright as you put in supposed to be but then, well I nothing else to say as writer's imagination. Your writing quality was better than me so 5-star so for speed of updating. Character design was good but not on full potential. Story development was good until just before end. I am not criticizing you but in good stories we don't inflat story like this. There is many stories where introduce bigger world then he was writing but that thing take process not like here where we just dump info at once. For future, please introduce bigger world step by step, like planet to solar system to star system to galaxy...
what if, when he comes out from portal and sees batman waiving his hand to superman?