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What's his level? there is almost no focus on his System in the passed few chapters. You get no sense of his progress.

Correction () - "regarded them as a (piggybank) to squeeze.

people, beasts and beings (missing a comma)

young lady or young miss

"A good chunck of their"

"even seen in his previous life." "previous art." is just confusing.

"Five loud thuds" is beter English "thumbs" make no sense.

Also maby change guzheng to zither as most people reading in English won't know what a guzheng is. Just a suggestion.

Hearing that, Murong Mengxin glared/looked at the maidservant briefly, making her shudder.

But the Xia Tian in front of her looked so different