The author’s writing skills have progressed since his previous work, The Innkeeper, particularly in that expectations set are upheld. The storyline and setting are great. The characters are decent and likable. However, the writing quality itself needs improvement. On the minor side, there are plentiful small grammatical errors, run-on sentences, and a notable amount of info dumping.  The work’s major flaw is the unnecessary, indirect, awkward, and abstract phrasing. This is particularly glaring in action scenes. Too often the MC’s direct senses are avoided or obfuscated. Instead, there is an uncalled-for post-analysis topdown view of events. It takes the reader out of the action.  Direct advice to the author: Please use direct phrasing. Write “It was this,” rather than, “He felt it was this,” or “He knew it was this,” or “It seemed like it was this.” Describe the MC experiences without processing them through a third party’s perspective. Avoid abstractions in fight scenes. Don’t write “Their fight, almost too fast for Nero to follow, seemed like a masterwork of a performance,” (quick example from chapter 9). Instead, write what is being sensed. For example, “A series of clangs rang out, as Invictus’s spear parried the colorful blur of magical sword attacks with masterful precision.” The second quote conveys similar information in a more detailed, direct, and exciting fashion. It gives us direct sound and sight without referring to Nero as the filter. This work could shine and garner greater popularity with an external editor or better self-editing that pays particular attention to the above flaws.

Hello again India specific English.

Ah, I see the dialect of India.

Ah these one-word “ThankYou”s make me realize its from the author of TerraNovaOnline. It reads in text to speech as “Thank Kya”. So in my head your characters all worship a deity named Kya.

This is definitely African lions…

Yeah, only a couple of chapters later I’m feeling addicted to the story again.

So far the story has been a delightful read. I enjoyed Leo's predicament immensely. When there's drama from misunderstandings and acting, the story shines. The writing quality is passable. The grammar can be a bit spotty, but read aloud, it sounds okay. The chapters I'm reading now are the slow part of the novel as it's the training stage. Other novels, would cover this with more time skips. It's still a decent read here but the energy is slightly fizzling. However, I can see how the increased skill of the characters from this training arc will likely amplify the future shenanigans I'm so looking forward to.

Obviously, there are exceptions, but in most cases, it would only be a pair or a single.

That's very different than mountain lions on Earth who are solitary except when paired for mating.

Up to now, it’s a fun, relaxed-paced, military academy training novel. It’s a pretty relaxing read, but there may be a lot more combat when the MC grows up a bit more. The MC doesn’t keep too many secrets compared to a lot of novels. And why would he when he is surrounded by feel-good helpful characters and not so many direct antagonists? He has a lot of good luck and is unique in his class. Recorded history was lost sometime in the past and the country is rediscovering a lot of its magic including his. Writing quality is good.

Warning: Don't read this if criticism offends you easily. I’m not trying to offend, but I will be honest and blunt with my opinion of the story so far. I expected more from the top of the collections rank. The story is dull confusing and feels like a lot of filler for no payoff. Yes, it’s early in the story, but I only enjoyed about 3 of the 48 chapters. The growth of MC’s stats is like watching paint dry because it doesn’t feel like any effort, and it drags on without enough explanation and description. Everything is madness this madness that blank here blank there. It’s supposed to evoke mystery, but it is confusing and feels like unnecessary BS. I couldn’t develop a stake in the character. He’s not developed enough, and what’s there doesn't blend well enough. I kept thinking the teased city building would be better, but at this point, I don’t know. Lastly, there’s some unengaging element in the writing style itself. Sorry, I don’t have time right now to analyze it to clarify specifically what it is. Here is the positive side: The author has a larger plan and a proven track record of commitment with regular releases. There are also signs of high effort. The story needs just needs to get there. Maybe also a better starting point.

These last few chapters read like a fever dream…

The story isn’t set in our world, but if brains function like they do in ours, his brain wouldn’t function if it stopped growing. Maybe growing should be maturing? And even this isn’t quite right, but at least generally acceptable.

It’s always unfortunate when the MC is set as a super genious but the author’s logic can’t keep up. Hopefully the author can avoid the pitfalls in later chapters.

No, you don’t get it. The title came true. The MC succeeded.

What an unfortunate choice to change this to California. It feels really off.

Yeah I feel like it’s conflicted between trying to get somewhere fast and giving the whole story. Perhaps I’ll enjoy it more when I get there. Thanks for the signpost.

Its all about perspective. While I do see the environmental difficulty and how, on its face, what was accomplished sounds improbable, the MC’s efforts were smaller compared to the results. So I still disagree from the perspective of skill and effort input. However, from a perspective further into the where we have a solid guess on how the nightmare spell judges these trials, he does indeed deserve his rating.

I was expecting more. The story isn't progressing in an exciting direction so far. The MC has too few challenging obsticles in his path for the theme. The drive behind the main character is very tacky. I find the MC’s interactions with the main antagonists to be immature and cringeworthy(maybe it should be like that if he's an inexperienced kid, but I don't like the time-hardened system acting like that). The intrinsic logic behind the narration is often immature. There is a lot of rushing through infodump after infodump, which leaves events and characters of the story feeling trivial and impersonal. In many scenes, the writing style lacks sufficient description and immersiveness. Don't get it wrong, it’s not a terrible read, just not great. To sum it up, it's readable and feels original, but it could and should be so much better.

So much cringe