WealthyRaccoon

ignoring what the show did to her character ( and everyone elses) i actually don't mind Sansa now that she's out of her valley girl phase,and access to the force makes her a whole lot less boring. cheers for the chapter!

thanks for the chapter, we deviating from Canon this early in the story? can't imagine kenjaku not changing things up if tengen is more of a problem

thanks for the chapter! any chance we'll see jaune gathering up more followers/tag alongs, starting an organisation or something?

really wanted to like this but the power scaling is just all over the place with characters seemingly becoming stronger and weaker entirely based on the author's whims.

looks like someone's been titrating

good to have you back!

I like the premise but the world building, story direction and character motives seem remarkably shallow and poorly thought out. cannonically crocodile was in alabasta 16 years before luffy started his journey, in the arc there's even a sub plot where he spent years sending sandstorms at an oasis town to kill its water supply, if you're instead going to say he only arrived a couple months before you have to explain why he got there 16 years late. there's also this weird assumption that since the shichibuki are cannonically abolished the title is useless? what? it was abolished solely because of the disaster at marineford, just kill blackboard and a whitebeard commander or two and you're golden. using foreknowledge to shield both the MC and the author from derailing the story is kinda the source of most bad fanfiction. and although this is fanfiction and the standards couldnt get any lower but please just spend an hour in a Google doc planning out an overarching plot instead of just copying the source.

author youve said that the reason we're dragging all this out is for the new mutants to overcome their fears and all that nonsense but can you establish why we would even remotely care about them or their personal development? Andrew doesn't seem to be particularly invested in them friendship or relationship wise, their powers are okay but nothing amazing in marvel land and they all seems like way too much of a hassle to make decent subordinates. if he was just watching on the sidelines doing absolutely nothing or just laughing at them I'd find that far more believable then him taking the time to effectively help them. Really just feels like you're rehashing the movie because it's pre-established? you can say he's doing it to seem like a smaller threat to "Essex" but you also need to say that clearly everytime he sandbags this hard.

hope he eventually creates a soul society dimension for them to reside in. souls after death in marvel world are kinda just left for eldritch gods/hell lords to snack on or lost to the astral plane most of the time. would be cool developing something approaching a proper afterlife

loved the progression of the fight, kudos man