Warhammer: Inquisitor journey

As a author ofc i will give myself 5 star . English not my native language so if u see some errors in work please express it in comments so i could fix it

So, first of all I didn't go far into the story so maybe it gets better later on. So Negatives first: -Grammar: it needs work clearly -Writing Style: It is convoluted. It's written in a style that feels heavy to read and goes into complicated tirades to explain simple things in roundabout ways. Updates: last update, as of this comment, is four months ago, so maybe dropped? And now for the Positives: - Characters: The MC feels real, as in have a realistic thought process and reaction, he is three dimensional. Same with his friends at the start they all felt real with their own character and not only stand-ins to progress the story. -Writing Style: yes, I put it in the negatives but here is the kicker, it is in the negatives because it's not well done, but the style in itself is great. So maybe more practice and refining would actually make it quite unique. The use of metaphors and other writing techniques is a bold choice, that if done well would make the writing have a great leap in quality, but for now it leaves a lot to desire. Premise: Absolutely Great. So all in all, good work my friend, keep writing and improving and I'm sure with time I'll find myself reading avidly one of your books 👍🏽

Me gusta mucho que la historia sea en warhammer, pero seria mas genial que hubiera mas accion.----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------