Sun Sun Fruit In One Piece[ON HIATUS]

Why are you shifting point of view all the time, It doesn’t make for a good story. Sometimes it makes sense but you shift POVs at random and it takes you out of the story. Keep to one POV som one can get to know the main character. The premise of the story was the thing that drew me to this story. But since you hope around the characters like pinball I am out. Good luck with your writing.

This is a good fanfic because it's hard to find fanfic about Escanor, I hope this is continued

don't mind the other rude reviewer. you are learning so it's always good to understand . and I agree hopping pov around is bad. stick to 1 and only swap when necessary. otherwise the story has good premise and all the best for your story . as you write you will get better . everyone has to start somewhere. cheers and have fun writing .

.sun-sun Fruit + Escanors powers + Dragon slayer magic-sun Dragon.

i liked the oc characters. author had made them somewhat fit right in to the one piece power system.

the story is good but its so hard to read, there are no spaces

Very nice story More chapters update please 🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏 I liked the story 😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

Nothing much just the repeated pov changes breaks the pace and stability of readers, still overall good till. Hope u can continue coz all escanor inspired fanfics gets dropped out. There is even one sun power based in onepiece fanfic but the power scaling went absurd levels then dropped. So hope u let the mc develop and don't make smth like sin of pride directly

dropped ? . .... . . .