journey to multiverse a tensura fanfic , Tempest brothers

I couldn't get past the first chapter even though I would like to read this novel. My head hurts from reading it. You know, there are a lot of tools out there to help with writing if your English isn't good, like Grammarly if you want to write by yourself, or ChatGPT to fix errors, etc. And the systems are stupid. Why would anyone want a system? I'm starting to get annoyed with all these system novels. Some are good, but people don't have the imagination to create their own skills for their characters and just copy-paste skills from every anime, movie, etc. It's so boring.

The author has mistakes in the text, but he tries to correct them by listening to his readers, the chapters come out quickly, in some places I would like to add my own things,but here the writer is not me,the author describes well the places where the actions take place

Not good. not for because it contains clones of mc.

5stars just for appreciation... (1). this story is very hard/hurt to read, there are to many inconsistency about conversation writing, sometime they used like "example" sometime MC: example and mostly always used [MC said, example....] (2). the story line is exact copy of OG novel with a little SI. (3). the whole chapter is a complete CHAOS, even if you familiar with tensura story line you will be got stroke with this.... (4). this comment was written after I read chap4, and the author mentioned the real story will start after siizue-arc which mean we need to re-read the [destroyed version of tensura LN]

as its author it is compulsory for me to give my book a 5 star

I decide that first world will be tensura.