HARRY POTTER:MAGICAL PREDATOR SYSTEM

There is little continuity and cohesion to the story for atleast the 18 chapters I tried to read. Its worse that the passage of time isn't made clear and that chronologically not much makes sense when compared with the HP books. Characters also do a sudden 180 in their disposition to eachother which is very confusing. The story feels like a patchwork of scenes that are chronologically out of order and thus don't make sense.

Read till chapter 6. So far the story is really good and interesting. Even I am not a Potter-head, I can still imagine clearly what's going on in the plot from my common knowledge. Maybe, the author is still inexperienced in this field that I found common mistakes here and there, but aside from that the idea of introducing system into witch's world is really unique. The only thing I would like the author to do is to upgrade his writing skills since I see a lot of potential in this. Rest, I wish author all the best for his journey ^^

I love this story...the mc isn't sissy..he doesn't care what people think about him...he has his priorities right .power unending...oh and the dilemma about his love interest...is it going to be Hermione ..or the strange girl Alice... .frigging love this author...keep up the good work.