God's Play(DISCONTINUED ROUGH DRAFT)

Author here for an overview of the status of the novel! The first few chapters currently have some grammar mistakes and might be vague, but as you progress, I assure you that it will get better. The chapters I currently have stockpile, which is planned to be released daily in approximately about a month, definitely shows improvement and I hope you will continue the support ヾ(≧▽≦*)o The real plot of this story will begin on the second arc, so don't give up on the novel just yet xD Thank you to those who have supported the novel from its start, and I hope you continue to do so! Jeonson out.

This story is lit! With a talented author, this novel was in good hands. I gotta say I'm impressed! Accompanied with hard work and perseverance, this will pave well in the future! Good luck author and may your novel be blessed with more readers!

The storyline is beautifully set in the created reality. The characters are also nicely created. It's pleasure to read... From the beginning, the reader can feel that author has a concept, an idea for the story (most of the stories lack that). You're doing a really great job!

I've only read the first chapter so far, but it is definitely a great book. Needs a bit of editing, but nothing too serious. Looking forward to reading more and seeing how things progress.

I love the story. How it was written and the arrangement, so cool hahhahhahahahhahhahahhahahahahahahhhahhahhahahahahhahahahahhhahahhahhahahahhahhhahahah

The novel has a manga like feel making the characters more colorful. The interactions between the characters are really cute and funny. I am interested to see how the prologue connects to the rest of the story. Keep up the good work.

i just finished reading a few of your chapters and they are great , it has a nice plot and your characters were introduced very well , looking forward to read more from you

Akane is a badass and my favourite type of female lead 📚 The world background is creative and imaginative. keep up the good work author ill wait for more updates!

Loving this story so far! The fake out with the dream in the first chapter caught me by surprise as is seemed to match the author's synopsis. From there we get introduced to the male and female leads who are both two excellent characters in their own right but also play off each other well with some hilarious banter and observations about each other. And then we have the two thrown into a fierce battle to the death with an otherworldly creature and some interesting, manga-like powers are put on display in a gripping scene. Very well written with a nice and snappy prose which flows beautifully. Can't recommend this one enough, especially for manga and magic fans.

Really liking it so far, needs slight tweaks in the punctuations and grammar department, but it definitely has pretty high potential. Waiting for more and more chapters and hope you have a good day author.

First the story has an interesting plot. The characters where introduced well, and you could already see their unique personalities. The world background is written well. Story development is flowing smoothly. Overall this book is already a great read! I would love to see this to grow more chapters. And definitely going to stay in my collections. Great work author! Greatly recommended!

God's Play is the staggered beginnings of a charming adventure. What do I mean by this? In this review, I'll delve into the conclusion I reached above. I'll start with the good. The characters are utterly charming, the author has deftly utilised first-person narration to open up the world inside the mind of Reo Miyazaki (Subsequently to be referred to as the MC.) The hybrid of running commentary and physical direction works really well. Through the skill of writing, the author has managed to establish quickly in my mind, and I can only assume the mind of all the readers, the personality and particular quirks of each character he has currently introduced. This has the effect of rapidly creating affinity between the reader and the characters. To care about a story, you have to care about the characters. I recently dropped a webnovel because while I found the premise fascinating, the main character was as animated as rotting wood. Sure there may have been something interesting happening, but it was happening so slowly that I couldn't stay invested. Happily, God's play does not suffer from uninteresting blank slabs of characters. Further, to the author's credit, the premise itself is really interesting. The author has created a mystery within the prologue that while unexplained, creates excitement as to how it all ties in. The way in which the author alludes to the prologue without delving too far into it, within the main body of the work, builds anticipation for when the full picture is brought to light. The actual story is itself nothing to sneeze at. Reapers and Remnants, the lurking threat of the primordial Remnants... lets just say, it's all exciting stuff. So that's the good, where lies the bad? To the author's credit, the writing is easy to read, however it would benefit massively from proofreading and editing. I found a myraid of issues regarding tenses shifts, redundant words and phrases and clunky writing. Furthermore, the author falls for the easy trap of saying and not showing. Somewhat justified as the MC has some emotional problems, there are places where the MC does feel something, and it would be beneficial to illustrate them. The formatting of the work is sometimes baffling. It improves somewhat as the chapters progress, but the author creates new lines too frequently. Sometimes for each sentence of narration. Occasionally, I find the new lines add effects to the work, but far too often, I find it to be superfluous. My biggest issue with this work comes in the middle of Chapter 7 (The latest chapter available at this time) The author changes POV within the same chapter. While this can be achieved rather well if the author were utilising third-person narration, in the first-person, it's a major taboo. It lends itself to massive confusion. It should be avoided at all costs. It takes more planning, and world-building is more difficult, but first-person narration is an intentional limitation on the perspectives of characters who are not part of the main cast. In trying to reap the benefits of first-person narration as well as remove the restraints, the author created a confusing situation. My suggestion there would be to learn how to utilise the restraints of first-person narration as a strength. By utilising the restraints, you'll be able to surprise the reader along with the character the narration switches between. So my thoughts? God's play is utterly charming, it really is. I look forward to reading more as it continues. It is, however, far from what it could be. By honing their craft, the author can really turn this charming tale, into a masterpiece. The question is whether they're willing to put in the hard work that would take. Writing Quality: 3/5 Stability of Updates: 5/5 Story Development: 4/5 Character Design: 4/5 World Background: 5/5 Overall: 21/25 Pretty damn good.

I've been reading the novel so far, and I think that it's decent. As it still is in the first arc of introducing the characters, the world, and the power system, I don't see anything that grabbed my interest right away, but I do think that this novel definitely has potential. Will be coming back to this novel after a month for the daily releases and see how this story will go. Good job.

The book has a certain feel to it and is quite nice. There is room for improvement though so good job. ...........,..,,...,,....,,,.,,,,,...

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Just finished reading all the 3 chapters, Gotta say, I am quite interested, Really has a Shounen kind of vibe from it. In terms of character development, I think that it is quite a fresh idea to have a main character that is unable to feel some of the emotions that normal people can. His inner conflict is really shown in the first chapter and I am interested to see his character development. But I think that the author could make it a bit clearer for readers to understand that he is unable to feel anger, fear, or sorrow. I thought it was kind of vague... As for story development, I really thought that the growing relationship between our main character and heroine was really cute. Their relationship is something you'd see in an average rom-com novels. I can't wait to see how their relationship progresses, In conclusion, I think this novel has great potential and I also advise others to check it out! Will definitely be looking out for new chapters frequently. Well done.