Mayhem_Wolf

The story is quite complex and makes the environment tense. The development is quite good. writing quality is top-notch, but I think it's a bit too overly complexified which actually makes it a bit tough to read. the only reason I took 0.2 stars away is that. but it's not bad, to be honest, it's just a bit too complex. Potential novel here.[img=coins]

That was a simple, subtle but very interesting piece of work. looking forward to reading more. I loved the simple language use which still had the capacity to lure me in.

The conflict with life is nicely portrayed. It was just as I liked it and urges me to continue with this. Definitely recommended

Life doesn't care about ambitions much. DEEP

That's a good sentence, I liked that

Pretty good but must say needs some work on English A pretty determined author, but she does lack some skills, which with a bit of tutoring can be made good. The plot is pretty simple yet good. A bit more work on the personalities of characters would be good.

Though the writing needs to be improved, the story is going pretty good. Why not make it a bit more dramatic than being a bit too straight to the point? Otherwise, this a topic which is least experimented with. Brave reach by the author , all the best

For a 13-year-old author, this is exceptional quality work. Destined to be a world-renowned author I guess. This book, is amazing, from the writing to the plot. from the setting of the story to the titles of each chapter, this is professional work. Loved it. Recommend it.

Just a suggestion. the flow is way too fast. You will run out of content soon if you take it this fast. Why not slow it down? I won't urge you to do it. just take my words or leave it, up to you.

suggestion- It should be women, as plural. Woman is singular. womens is not correct